Number of posts : 6708 Age : 30 Location : Aus Registration date : 2011-05-07
Subject: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 30th September 2011, 05:19
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Hello~ I'm Lillie. So you wanna be critic-ed? I have been singing for nearly 10 years and have the music knowledge to match. I don't have perfect pitch but I have a good ear so I can help you with your harmonies~ I am fluent in English, Mandarin and Cantonese but I also know the pronunciations of Japanese and Korean.
Ok! Maximum of 2 clips per person per post! Please only post once after every 10 member submissions~ give other people a chance to be critic-ed~
Song challenge: CHINESE: Fahrenheit songs Rainie Yang songs FAMA songs Fish Leong songs Show Luo songs Joey Yung songs
I will critic out of 100% and I will give tips to improve. Critic based on: Pitch Diction Phrasing Emotion Mixing (Vibrato)
I critic on what I hear, no bias towards anything~ Go!
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Hyuriko LTS Raindrop
Number of posts : 419 Age : 31 Location : France , Montbéliard Registration date : 2011-04-17
Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 7th July 2012, 12:30
Hi lilie ! I do my best for that my english pronunciation will be decent... I hope it's ok... Song : Roling in the deep Artist : Adèle Link : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulKXXNZziZI
sakisaki LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 484 Age : 32 Registration date : 2011-07-25
Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 9th July 2012, 15:55
- a little wobbly on pitch some low notes and run: song extends to the bottom of your range so you need to focus when singing this song. A tip for singing runs is to focus on each individual note your singing and gently 'attach' them by slurring so that you get a clearer run. Very good job here~ 90%
xxlillie LTS Admin
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Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 14th July 2012, 01:34
AliciaBoos wrote:
Song : Volume Up Artist : 4 Minute Link : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6yzJEd8coi4&feature=channel&list=UL It's a duet cover with AmeliaaBoos . Yeah , She's my real life friend too . :) I took Hyuna and Jiyoon's parts while AmeliaaBoos took Sohyun , Gayoon and Jihyun . Incase you would like to see the lyrics , It's here :)
Spoiler:
- wobbly pitch: take deeper breaths to hold the phrase - slight timing problems: either sing without a synth melody in the instrumental or follow the timing of the instrumental so that off-timing is not so much of a problem - mixing: most of the song was peaking(too loud thus lowering song quality). When mixing it's best to mix everything together at a lower volume level then amplify the final exported track to avoid peaking. 75%
xxlillie LTS Admin
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Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 14th July 2012, 01:38
Hyuriko wrote:
Hi lilie ! I do my best for that my english pronunciation will be decent... I hope it's ok... Song : Roling in the deep Artist : Adèle Link : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulKXXNZziZI
Spoiler:
- pronunciation: sometimes difficult to understand but it is decent :) - timing: most of the time your timing could be passed off as rubato, but it would slip at some places and not fit very well. - slight pitch wobbles: you've already done a good job on an Adele song~! but more practice of taking deeper breaths will help 80%
xxlillie LTS Admin
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Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 14th July 2012, 01:43
ooh~ i see i see~ - pitch: song seems a bit low for your voice, so maybe you can change the key of the song higher. - pronunciation: sounds pretty good~ - phrasing: seems a little choppy, for a ballad long phrases sound more fitting and adds to the emotion 75%
Shiori Rainbow
Number of posts : 896 Age : 29 Location : Where the polar bears roam and beavers chomp and igloos reside~! Come ski with me in July ;D Registration date : 2012-03-02
Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 14th July 2012, 02:30
*skipping this post* I know I set a challenge for you so it's not fair to critique this~
Aww come on, please? Especially since you set me the challenge, I'd love the feedback to see how well I met it ><
If you insist..
Spoiler:
Pitch - transitions between notes are sometimes too slow so it sounds out of tune. Need to focus more to hit the note quicker~ Diction - ends of words are cut off: that, fight, hand. Clear diction in an song like this brings out more emotions~ Mixing - instrumental was a tad bit too loud, and sounds very full compared to your voice so you could've maybe sung doubles to make your voice sound fuller. 75%
Shiori Rainbow
Number of posts : 896 Age : 29 Location : Where the polar bears roam and beavers chomp and igloos reside~! Come ski with me in July ;D Registration date : 2012-03-02
Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 15th July 2012, 02:32
Thanks Lillie <3
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Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 15th July 2012, 06:29
xxlillie wrote:
Spoiler:
Watch out for your pitch on notes - take deeper breaths to support them. Harmonies are hit but not confidently and supported - singing harmonies requires a good ear, listen to the harmonies in the song and try to recreate them in your singing. If you know a bit about music theory then you would also know that the most harmonies are 3 semitones/pitches higher than the melody. 80%
Spoiler:
Very pitchy - singalong with the song a couple of times to be confident with the melody. Sometimes you are pushing the notes out too hard and sometimes too soft which results in sharp and flat pitches throughout the song. More practice of the song and more confidence in what you are singing will result in a better cover. 70%
I just saw this now xD Thanks Lillie =) Can you criticize this two, please?
Number of posts : 419 Age : 31 Location : France , Montbéliard Registration date : 2011-04-17
Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 19th July 2012, 13:04
xxlillie wrote:
Hyuriko wrote:
Hi lilie ! I do my best for that my english pronunciation will be decent... I hope it's ok... Song : Roling in the deep Artist : Adèle Link : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulKXXNZziZI
Spoiler:
- pronunciation: sometimes difficult to understand but it is decent :) - timing: most of the time your timing could be passed off as rubato, but it would slip at some places and not fit very well. - slight pitch wobbles: you've already done a good job on an Adele song~! but more practice of taking deeper breaths will help 80%
Thanks lilie it's kind ♥ I'll probably redo this cover later because off the pitch T___T
Lilie can u critic an another cover ? It's in French it's ok ? And don't worry at the end it cut... I'll probably repost the cover later ^___^ I hope it's ok if it's french T__T Song : J'aimerais tellement Artist : Jenna lee Link : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JcxG3nin64Y Thankyu ♥
KunoichiofDestinyKasumi LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 171 Age : 27 Location : United Kingdom Registration date : 2011-04-20
Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 25th July 2012, 18:56
Number of posts : 896 Age : 29 Location : Where the polar bears roam and beavers chomp and igloos reside~! Come ski with me in July ;D Registration date : 2012-03-02
Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 30th July 2012, 20:09
Song: You and I Artist: IU Lyrics: Well, it's my own combo of the Japanese and Korean versions so I don't really have a link to it :/
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Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 19th August 2012, 07:45
AClovetosing wrote:
xxlillie wrote:
Spoiler:
Watch out for your pitch on notes - take deeper breaths to support them. Harmonies are hit but not confidently and supported - singing harmonies requires a good ear, listen to the harmonies in the song and try to recreate them in your singing. If you know a bit about music theory then you would also know that the most harmonies are 3 semitones/pitches higher than the melody. 80%
Spoiler:
Very pitchy - singalong with the song a couple of times to be confident with the melody. Sometimes you are pushing the notes out too hard and sometimes too soft which results in sharp and flat pitches throughout the song. More practice of the song and more confidence in what you are singing will result in a better cover. 70%
I just saw this now xD Thanks Lillie =) Can you criticize this two, please?
Song 1: Pitch - top notes flat, bottom notes sharp: focus more(belt when needed and change the low note to a higher key) Phrasing - phrasing is a bit strange sometimes: breath needs to be bigger to support a phrase Emotion - good Mixing - off-timing, instrumental slower than voice 70%
Song 2: Pitch - pitchy low notes Phrasing - good Emotion - chorus could've had more emotion 80%
xxlillie LTS Admin
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Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 19th August 2012, 07:47
Liza wrote:
Oops, I didn't see you have an analyse centre and a critic centre ^^
can you critic my cover please? It's the same as the one I posted in your analysing centre.
Song 1: Pitch - pitchy on some notes Diction - ends of words cut off Phrasing - good Emotion - good 90%
Song 2: Pitch - slight pitchy notes/harmonies Diction - breath Phrasing - good Emotion - good Mixing - some low notes lost in the music 90%
Both these songs suit your voice very well~
xxlillie LTS Admin
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Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 19th August 2012, 08:00
Hyuriko wrote:
xxlillie wrote:
Hyuriko wrote:
Hi lilie ! I do my best for that my english pronunciation will be decent... I hope it's ok... Song : Roling in the deep Artist : Adèle Link : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulKXXNZziZI
Spoiler:
- pronunciation: sometimes difficult to understand but it is decent :) - timing: most of the time your timing could be passed off as rubato, but it would slip at some places and not fit very well. - slight pitch wobbles: you've already done a good job on an Adele song~! but more practice of taking deeper breaths will help 80%
Thanks lilie it's kind ♥ I'll probably redo this cover later because off the pitch T___T
Lilie can u critic an another cover ? It's in French it's ok ? And don't worry at the end it cut... I'll probably repost the cover later ^___^ I hope it's ok if it's french T__T Song : J'aimerais tellement Artist : Jenna lee Link : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JcxG3nin64Y Thankyu ♥
Spoiler:
Pitch - pitchy on some notes Phrasing - good Emotion - good Mixing - verse a little soft, could be louder 90%
Very interesting to see Eva on a more rock type of song~ nice~
xxlillie LTS Admin
Number of posts : 6708 Age : 30 Location : Aus Registration date : 2011-05-07
Subject: Re: [CLOSED]Lillie's Critic Centre -- Critic & Tips 19th August 2012, 08:07
Song 1: Pitch - slightly pitchy Phrasing - good Emotion - good, lacking a bit in the last part of the chorus Mixing - instrumental too loud at places/voice too soft Timing - slight off-timed parts 80%
Song 2: Pitch - harmonies off-pitch(wrong key), pitchy at pre-chorus Phrasing - good Emotion - good 85%
- to fix slight pitchyness, be more confident when singing :)
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