Number of posts : 71 Age : 35 Registration date : 2011-09-13
Subject: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 16th September 2011, 02:15
Well Hello there.
im quite interested when received a message from panda lulu to open a thread here.
here i am. im underwoodrockz at youtube. u can call me amer.
im not a good singer, but i do have a good ear. i can even hear if my recording got any off-pitch part but usually im lazy to fix it. hahahha
if u really want me to comment on ur singing, feel free to do so. but dont feel offended when i say quite a harsh words towards ur singing. n if u want to counter about it, feel free to do so too...
cheers..
PiggyMelody Retired
Number of posts : 1116 Age : 24 Location : California Registration date : 2011-01-06
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 16th September 2011, 02:53
Hi ^^ Pretty interested to see my work get criticized by a proffessional .~
Hope you criticize mandarin songs. ^-^
Kitkat LTS Raindrop
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 16th September 2011, 06:25
Thank you Melody for submitting your solo cover on Amer's critic center.
As only a few of you have seen, Amer have been officially hired from outside by myself. He decided to accept the invitation and challenge with us in this new fresh Website. Amer's addition here will be an "extra plus" that other website don't have. I'm convinced it's this way that some of you will be boosted to improve more and more your singing skills.
It's said in his intro post, make sure you really want a critic before submitting a performance here. To make things clear, Amer and me have a totally opposit critic procedure.
You're warned.
Underwoodrockz LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 71 Age : 35 Registration date : 2011-09-13
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 16th September 2011, 12:11
PiggyMelody wrote:
Hi ^^ Pretty interested to see my work get criticized by a proffessional .~
Hope you criticize mandarin songs. ^-^
VERSE 1: wo de shi jie (ur starting is off pitch already...) bian de qi miao geng nan yi yan yu hai yi wei shi cong tian er jiang de meng jing zhi dao que ting shou de wen du lai zhi ni xin li zhe yi ke wo chong yu yong gan shuo ai ni
the other part here in the 1st verse is ok.
CHORUS: yi kai shi wo zhi ku zhe kan ni zhuang zuo bu jin yi / xin que piao guo qu hai qie xi ni mei fa xian wo <------ start 'ni mei......' is a bit flat duo zai jiao luo
*** this part is very2 flat n mess***
mang zhe kuai le mang zhe gan dong cong bi ci mo sheng dao shu / hui shi wo men cong wei xiang guo <--- bd breathing zhen ai / dao xian zai / bu gan qi dai
*** this part is very2 flat n mess***
VERSE 2: yao zhen ming zi ji / ceng bei ni xiang qi REALLY? wo hu si luan xiang jiu cong jin tian qi I WISH xiang yi ge xian jing / que cong wei you yu / xiang xin ni zhen de yuan yi / jiu qing gei wo jing xi
*** 2nd verse is okay....***
VERSE 3: guan yu ai qing <--- it look a bit rush here. guo qu mei you yi xiang de jie ju na tian qi / que dian fu le zi ji luo ji wo de huai yi / sou you da an yin ni er ming bai zhuan a zhuan / jiu zhen de yu jian MR.RIGHT
this part sounds a bit flat... neo ttaemune lalalala......
2. ur rap voice n singing voice is a bit imbalance. ur rap voice sounds louder than ur singing voice and sometimes it sounds weak.. (its different from sad voice).. at certain part only can sounds a bit sad it this song.
3. u didnt reach it correctly the notes here...
I miss you, I need you Shiganeul dwi deollyeo wanna kiss you again, my boy
1. this song is amazing! 1st time heard, already like it. haha..
2. there is one voice with a bad recording quality yet, she is the worst here.
3. after i looked at the video, hyuriko, sometimes, u r good n sometimes u r totally out of pitch. i wonder y...
4. the other girls, dowan to comment more as they didnt asked bout it.
5. to hyuriko : u hv quite a good tone, the last part is 1 key higher than previous chorus, so, u should sing 1 key higher also. other than that, u dont hv much prob..
2.5/5
DustbinHugger Rainbow
Number of posts : 1242 Age : 27 Location : Singapore :D Registration date : 2011-07-05
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 20th September 2011, 16:30
this part sounds a bit flat... neo ttaemune lalalala......
2. ur rap voice n singing voice is a bit imbalance. ur rap voice sounds louder than ur singing voice and sometimes it sounds weak.. (its different from sad voice).. at certain part only can sounds a bit sad it this song.
3. u didnt reach it correctly the notes here...
I miss you, I need you Shiganeul dwi deollyeo wanna kiss you again, my boy
2. maybe u can do the mixing better because certain voices seems louder than others. (as stated above for rap n singing voice)
3. there is not much off-pitch part but u can do the harmonization instead of make the voice double at certain part.
4. try to add vibrato if possible
2.8/5
Thaks so much for the critique! :) It helped a lot :) And yeah I did went off and didn't really know how to rap with eh... Emotions >< Thank you so much! :D
fujisakura8906 LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 336 Age : 35 Registration date : 2010-07-27
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 20th September 2011, 20:45
i'm prepared to be critique too. haha....here you go ....
i want to improve. hehe....
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 20th September 2011, 22:16
C:
Ginger Rainbow
Number of posts : 1745 Age : 27 Location : California Registration date : 2011-08-23
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 20th September 2011, 22:16
Ooh you really know your stuff! Please tell me your honest thoughts so I can get better ^^
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Noora LTS Raindrop
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 20th September 2011, 22:20
ooh could you give me your thoughts on my beast soom cover?
Daphne LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 805 Age : 26 Location : Antioch, California Registration date : 2011-06-14
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 21st September 2011, 04:08
Well it looks like your busy XD so Here's a short recording. I only sang the song up to the end of the chorus..one more thing I'm not completely familiar w/ the song so I might've made a mistake in my singing somewhere near the end >,<
1. this song is amazing! 1st time heard, already like it. haha..
2. there is one voice with a bad recording quality yet, she is the worst here.
3. after i looked at the video, hyuriko, sometimes, u r good n sometimes u r totally out of pitch. i wonder y...
4. the other girls, dowan to comment more as they didnt asked bout it.
5. to hyuriko : u hv quite a good tone, the last part is 1 key higher than previous chorus, so, u should sing 1 key higher also. other than that, u dont hv much prob..
2.5/5
Thank u so much for your critic :3, I really apreciate it ! I know at the end i'm "Afraid" to hight the note more.... Because i don't want to sing false :x... Thank u so much again ^-^
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 21st September 2011, 14:16
Please critic me :D
Underwoodrockz LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 71 Age : 35 Registration date : 2011-09-13
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 21st September 2011, 15:03
fujisakura8906 wrote:
i'm prepared to be critique too. haha....here you go ....
i want to improve. hehe....
The day when I first saw you You were smiling shyly towards me After today, we will be closer Every day, I have heart-fluttering expectations
Oh What can I tell you And what can I do to make you laugh I fear it'll get awkward If I make the first move So all I can do is smile shyly
Hopefully we can speak banmal to each other Even though it's still awkward and unfamiliar Instead of saying 'thank you' Talk to me in a friendlier way
Hopefully <--- a bit faster here we can speak banmal to each other You walk towards me slowly, step by step Now look into my hazel eyes, and say to me I love you
The day when I held your hand I felt my heart stop beating inside I don't even remember what I said to you All I know my stomach is fluttering inside
Hopefully we can speak banmal to each other Even though it's still awkward and unfamiliar Instead of saying 'thank you' Talk to me in a much friendlier way
its quite faster then the real beat here.
Hopefully we can speak banmal to each other You walk towards me slowly, step by step Now look into my hazel eyes and say to me I love you <--- shaking n a bit off-pitch here.
Hopefully we can fall in love with each other I'll never let go of your hands from my grasp The light of your eyes, gazing at me I hope there will only be joyful smiles
shaking n too fast here.
We can probably fall in love with each other We can lean on and take care of each other Looking into your eyes, my hazel eyes They're telling you That I love you
1. the lyrics is so damn funny n not really suitable with the beat.
2. u dont hv much problem on pitching but u really have problem in order to follow the music correctly.. mostly u sing faster than the lyrics....
3. ur falsetto is not good
4. the key of the song should be a bit higher, ur low notes is not dat good too..
2/5
Underwoodrockz LTS Firefly
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 21st September 2011, 15:07
im quite busy nowadays... have a lot of pending works..
will try to finish 1 review per day.. be patient.. :)
fujisakura8906 LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 336 Age : 35 Registration date : 2010-07-27
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 21st September 2011, 16:42
Underwoodrockz wrote:
fujisakura8906 wrote:
i'm prepared to be critique too. haha....here you go ....
i want to improve. hehe....
The day when I first saw you You were smiling shyly towards me After today, we will be closer Every day, I have heart-fluttering expectations
Oh What can I tell you And what can I do to make you laugh I fear it'll get awkward If I make the first move So all I can do is smile shyly
Hopefully we can speak banmal to each other Even though it's still awkward and unfamiliar Instead of saying 'thank you' Talk to me in a friendlier way
Hopefully <--- a bit faster here we can speak banmal to each other You walk towards me slowly, step by step Now look into my hazel eyes, and say to me I love you
The day when I held your hand I felt my heart stop beating inside I don't even remember what I said to you All I know my stomach is fluttering inside
Hopefully we can speak banmal to each other Even though it's still awkward and unfamiliar Instead of saying 'thank you' Talk to me in a much friendlier way
its quite faster then the real beat here.
Hopefully we can speak banmal to each other You walk towards me slowly, step by step Now look into my hazel eyes and say to me I love you <--- shaking n a bit off-pitch here.
Hopefully we can fall in love with each other I'll never let go of your hands from my grasp The light of your eyes, gazing at me I hope there will only be joyful smiles
shaking n too fast here.
We can probably fall in love with each other We can lean on and take care of each other Looking into your eyes, my hazel eyes They're telling you That I love you
1. this song is quite interesting but its TOO long n a bit BORING! pls cut it to half becoz it keep repeating!
2. since this song is repeating, u should make a variation version of the same part. if not, it just like u r record it once n paste it to the rest same part. it sounds so similar. BORING!
3. u use too much falsetto here which is quite annoying. ur falsetto voice is ok, but if the whole song i just hear the same sound without any climax, its too painful for me to finish it.
4. if u put on or make some vibrato at the end of notes, should be better.
2/5
Underwoodrockz LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 71 Age : 35 Registration date : 2011-09-13
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 23rd September 2011, 19:21
ScarletGinger wrote:
Ooh you really know your stuff! Please tell me your honest thoughts so I can get better ^^
Doushite Koibito ni narenai no? Ja doushite Kuchidzuke wo shita no? Ano yoru Hoka ni Suki na hito ga ita no Watashi Na noni Kokoro uba wareta Itsumo no nakama to issho ni DORAIBU shitari Nigiya kana mama ga yokatta Ano KISU de kawatta
Anata wo massugu mirenai Minna to no BAKA hanashi mo waraenai Shizen ni hanashi kakete kuru Anata ga kowai Ano yoru ni Nee Modo shite Kuchidzuke no mae ni Modo shite
Doushite Futari dewa aenai no? Ja doushite Denwa shite kuru no? Tama ni
Betsu ni Hajimete janaitte koto de Minna ni sou itte tashi
Tokai de nakama ga dekite Ureshi katta no Furyou no mane goto datta wa Ano KISU de kawatta
Anata no egao ga mabushii Minna to iru toki datte suki sugiru DonDon kodoku ni natteku Jibun ga kowai Sono mune de Nee Sasaete
Anata no egao ga mabushii Minna to iru toki datte suki sugiru DonDon kodoku ni natteku Jibun ga kowai Sono mune de Nee Sasaete Ano yoru mitai ni KISU shite
1. this song is quite interesting but its TOO long n a bit BORING! pls cut it to half becoz it keep repeating!
2. since this song is repeating, u should make a variation version of the same part. if not, it just like u r record it once n paste it to the rest same part. it sounds so similar. BORING!
3. u use too much falsetto here which is quite annoying. ur falsetto voice is ok, but if the whole song i just hear the same sound without any climax, its too painful for me to finish it.
4. if u put on or make some vibrato at the end of notes, should be better.
2/5
that's cause the lyrics for this music box version is different from the original song, which is faster and has longer lyrics w/ different verses in different orders. i tried with the original but it didn't fit the song so i had to find the ones for this version. and it's not the same parts repeating...LOL; just the same melody at certain parts, but different lyrics... but thank you for your critique, i'll keep these points in mind next time
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 23rd September 2011, 21:45
me too.. i really want to improve..
can you critic my short cover of Gee ^__^ thank you..
Number of posts : 1745 Age : 27 Location : California Registration date : 2011-08-23
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 24th September 2011, 01:57
Underwoodrockz wrote:
ScarletGinger wrote:
Ooh you really know your stuff! Please tell me your honest thoughts so I can get better ^^
Doushite Koibito ni narenai no? Ja doushite Kuchidzuke wo shita no? Ano yoru Hoka ni Suki na hito ga ita no Watashi Na noni Kokoro uba wareta Itsumo no nakama to issho ni DORAIBU shitari Nigiya kana mama ga yokatta Ano KISU de kawatta
Anata wo massugu mirenai Minna to no BAKA hanashi mo waraenai Shizen ni hanashi kakete kuru Anata ga kowai Ano yoru ni Nee Modo shite Kuchidzuke no mae ni Modo shite
Doushite Futari dewa aenai no? Ja doushite Denwa shite kuru no? Tama ni
Betsu ni Hajimete janaitte koto de Minna ni sou itte tashi
Tokai de nakama ga dekite Ureshi katta no Furyou no mane goto datta wa Ano KISU de kawatta
Anata no egao ga mabushii Minna to iru toki datte suki sugiru DonDon kodoku ni natteku Jibun ga kowai Sono mune de Nee Sasaete
Anata no egao ga mabushii Minna to iru toki datte suki sugiru DonDon kodoku ni natteku Jibun ga kowai Sono mune de Nee Sasaete Ano yoru mitai ni KISU shite
1. sorry to say.. u seems do know how to follow the right key.. its all on the wrong key...
2. only on certain parts only u sing correctly but it was a very minor part.
3. listen carefully to the music while singing as it can be helpful for u to sing with the right key.
0.3/5
Wow. Thanks for that ^^ I used to be able to sing this song when I was little, but I guess I can't anymore. xD Really thanks for the advise ^^ with ought this I would never know that this was out of my range.
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 24th September 2011, 07:23
i'm curiouss~
^O^ thank you~
Guest Guest
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 24th September 2011, 20:44
please critique me~ ^^
Underwoodrockz LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 71 Age : 35 Registration date : 2011-09-13
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 25th September 2011, 04:52
SkyPrincessJ wrote:
ooh could you give me your thoughts on my beast soom cover?
Ha Let me talk about my Chagapge doraseon dwitmoseube sigani jamsi meomchun deut hae Hayake dwaebeorin meorissogen neol jabaya dwae ani neol bonaeya dwae Oh neol itgo saldeon neol itji motae uldeon na Doel daero doeraji nado nal jal molla
u r off-beat here. it sounds so messy here.
Ijeobollae niga doraseomyeon nan dasin japji anheullae [Niga han beonman han beonman dasi tto] saenggakhae dallan mare Deoneun gomin an hallae ije neoreul beorillae
the low notes here became off-pitch bcoz u cant reach it. it sounded a key higher than it should be.
Gaji ma nareul tteonagajin ma myeot beoneul saenggakhae bwado Naega neoreul itgineun himdeul geot gata ijeul su eobseul geot gata
[I can't take my breath breath breath] [I can't take my breath breath breath] [YoSeob]Sigani galsurok jeomjeom jinagalsurok oh nan deo [I can't hold my breath breath breath] [I can't hold my breath breath breath] Yeah Galsurok naneun deo jakkuman nae sumi makhyeo wa nae sumi yeah
this sounded ok..
Jiwobollae ni jarin ije eobseo doraol gotdo eobseo [Niga naege deo naege deo omyeon] nan deo meoreojyeo gal geoya Ije jom bikyeojullae naneun neoreul beorillae
u r totally off-pitch here bcoz the note is too low for u
the chorus is same. ok.
I don't know I don't know yeah
2nd i dont know seems a bit rushing...
Yes or No bichi jamdeun bam buri kkeojin bang eongkyeobeorin neoe daehan saenggagi Pulliji anha dodaeche mwol tataeya jogeuminama wiroga doelkka Gipeotdeon sarangi joeilkka Doel daero doeraji huh nado nal jal molla
1. u dont hv much problem on pitching n off beat much. it sounds quite ok
2. the key should be higher as u r a female that singing male's song. the key different would make this cover better.
3. ur breathing n long notes also quite ok, but it would be better with the vibrato.
4. overall, u r ok.
2.5/5
Underwoodrockz LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 71 Age : 35 Registration date : 2011-09-13
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 25th September 2011, 05:02
Daphne wrote:
Well it looks like your busy XD so Here's a short recording. I only sang the song up to the end of the chorus..one more thing I'm not completely familiar w/ the song so I might've made a mistake in my singing somewhere near the end >,<
1. i dont really like acapella thingy much. cant measured whether u r on the beat r not.
2. i dont think u hv much pitch prob as in this cover but ur high notes is not good and ur low notes also not good enough.
3. ur falsetto also didnt gv much impact to this song. the falsetto should make ur singing sounds so please but u sings WITHOUT emotion.
4. overall, its ok but not good enough..
2/5
Underwoodrockz LTS Firefly
Number of posts : 71 Age : 35 Registration date : 2011-09-13
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 25th September 2011, 12:56
Kelly wrote:
Please critic me :D
im lazy to find a lyrics. will comment by seconds n minutes.
0:50 - 0:55 = off-pitch. u cant reach the low notes well. HAJIMA word also shaky.
1:00 = hmm, off-pitch a bit.
1:05 - 1:09 = off pitch n u seems uncertain at oooo~ part...
1:17 = off-pitch
1:22-1:24 = same low note which u cant hit well.
1:29 - 1:32 = now, its the high note which u didnt hit it properly
1:41 - 2:14 = fuh, u did badly at the chorus. u cannot hit the notes properly here. most of the time u off-pitch. the worst is after 1:57... :ggt:
2:32 - 3:33= same thing, the low notes u cant hit, the high notes also. same mistakes as u did at 1st half of the songs. the chorus getting worst when u try to project ur voice more. :dreamz1:
3:34 - 3:50 = this is quite ok la. compared to other parts.
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 26th September 2011, 14:17
Look like the bussiness is going well ;D.
umm... this is a group collab so... 0_0"""
I was Janey the rapper. the lyrics can be found in the description :D
Noora LTS Raindrop
Number of posts : 294 Age : 29 Location : stalking B.A.P wherever they go Registration date : 2011-08-13
Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 26th September 2011, 14:49
Underwoodrockz wrote:
SkyPrincessJ wrote:
ooh could you give me your thoughts on my beast soom cover?
Ha Let me talk about my Chagapge doraseon dwitmoseube sigani jamsi meomchun deut hae Hayake dwaebeorin meorissogen neol jabaya dwae ani neol bonaeya dwae Oh neol itgo saldeon neol itji motae uldeon na Doel daero doeraji nado nal jal molla
u r off-beat here. it sounds so messy here.
Ijeobollae niga doraseomyeon nan dasin japji anheullae [Niga han beonman han beonman dasi tto] saenggakhae dallan mare Deoneun gomin an hallae ije neoreul beorillae
the low notes here became off-pitch bcoz u cant reach it. it sounded a key higher than it should be.
Gaji ma nareul tteonagajin ma myeot beoneul saenggakhae bwado Naega neoreul itgineun himdeul geot gata ijeul su eobseul geot gata
[I can't take my breath breath breath] [I can't take my breath breath breath] [YoSeob]Sigani galsurok jeomjeom jinagalsurok oh nan deo [I can't hold my breath breath breath] [I can't hold my breath breath breath] Yeah Galsurok naneun deo jakkuman nae sumi makhyeo wa nae sumi yeah
this sounded ok..
Jiwobollae ni jarin ije eobseo doraol gotdo eobseo [Niga naege deo naege deo omyeon] nan deo meoreojyeo gal geoya Ije jom bikyeojullae naneun neoreul beorillae
u r totally off-pitch here bcoz the note is too low for u
the chorus is same. ok.
I don't know I don't know yeah
2nd i dont know seems a bit rushing...
Yes or No bichi jamdeun bam buri kkeojin bang eongkyeobeorin neoe daehan saenggagi Pulliji anha dodaeche mwol tataeya jogeuminama wiroga doelkka Gipeotdeon sarangi joeilkka Doel daero doeraji huh nado nal jal molla
1. u dont hv much problem on pitching n off beat much. it sounds quite ok
2. the key should be higher as u r a female that singing male's song. the key different would make this cover better.
3. ur breathing n long notes also quite ok, but it would be better with the vibrato.
4. overall, u r ok.
2.5/5
oh thanks for critiquing me, yeah i do realise that i went off pitch hehe but i'm prepared to do better ^^
Daphne LTS Firefly
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 27th September 2011, 22:10
Underwoodrockz wrote:
Daphne wrote:
Well it looks like your busy XD so Here's a short recording. I only sang the song up to the end of the chorus..one more thing I'm not completely familiar w/ the song so I might've made a mistake in my singing somewhere near the end >,<
1. gee is my all time fav song. so, its hard to pleased me.
2. it jus ok. nothing great about the cover
1.5/5
Hara LTS Raindrop
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 30th September 2011, 04:25
ouu i feel like posting now ^^
Spoiler:
please be supppppper honest i would like to improve :)
Thanks <3
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 30th September 2011, 04:46
aha mianhae, didn't mean for you to listen to all 10 minutes XD it was the only relatively recent thing i'd done though >_< anywho thanks for the critique i'll see whati can do to improve ^-^ [though i'm not sure how to make my voice...special? o.O]
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Subject: Re: [OPEN] Underwoodrockz's Critic Corner 1st October 2011, 00:25
Underwoodrockz wrote:
shakyshakeeeee wrote:
me please :)
0:22 - 0:39 = i prefer u to used ur chest voice instead of head voice but its ok, its not off-pitch.. :)
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